Ok, some things I noticed are:
I definitely need more pauses between moves.
The hand change to one of the overhead strikes didn’t have good palming.
On the “twirl” disarm when I finished the circle, the bo was not level; the far end was pointing up a bit.
On the move right after that, I had the bo up too high to block a strike to the lower leg, instead of bringing it lower and then lifting up.